可适当增加从句和复杂句使用;有效地使用了语句间的衔接成分;文中词汇表达不够丰富,学术词汇方面要多累积。
I am very thankful to our school,because he can give me a chance to write my feeling about learning English. Now more and more people realized English is very important and It is very necessary for us. First of all,English Which is widely used all over the world.Secondly,we can not only introduce our motherland to all over the worldm but also learn the science of developing country,to the best serves for our country.You know,the more English you know,the more message you will get.Thirdly It is very interesting to learn English.