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My honme town has changed a lot. For example there use to have many trees and the river was very cearly. But the house is very easy and small . The streets also were very norrw.Many people were very poor. Time goes by . Even thuogh there are many big ang heigh billdings,the people get rich ,there are more and mor cars. The enviroment gets worse. The streets are very crowded , trees and fishes are less and less . So I think solve enviroment problem is the best important thing.