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My home town has changed a lot. For example there use to have many trees and the river was very clearly. But the house is very simple and small. The streets also were very narrow.Many people were very poor. Time goes by. Even though there are many big and high bill-dings,the people get rich,there are more and more cars. The environment gets worse. The streets are very crowded, trees and fishes are less and less. So I think we should solve environment problem quckily.