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I have a good firend, whitch is call Kate. She have a brown long hair, and a couple of deep black eyes. What a beautiful girl she is! She is a kind of nice guy, friendly, smart, easy-going, ect.. She is good at singing, incuding drawing. I really like her. It's so happy to be friend with her.