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Dear editor Some people believe that fresh water will never be used up. Because it's possible for us to get fresh water from the rivers, the lakes, the wells or even from the seas. It seems that we have sufficient fresh water to use. But as a matter of fact, the world's population has been increasing madly.We will need a great number of fresh water. Secondly,with the development of industry,a large amount of water is being used in factories. What's more, it's common that many factories pour a large number of poisonous, wastes into the rivers. Lakes as well as into the seas. Which will, of course, cause much pollution. In fact, in some big cites fresh water can't meet the people's daily need. Future may break out. We may even fight for fresh water than.