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拼写很棒，可适当增加学术词汇的使用；作者句法不错，但是文章整体句子稍微偏短；衔接成分太少，文章结构欠佳。
Dear editor Some people believe that fresh water will never be used up. Because it's possible for us to get fresh water from the rivers, the lakes, the wells or even from the seas. It seems that we have sufficient fresh water to use. But as a matter of fact, the world's population has been increasing madly.We will need a great number of fresh water. Secondly,with the development of industry,a large amount of water is being used in factories. What's more, it's common that many factories pour a large number of poisonous, wastes into the rivers. Lakes as well as into the seas. Which will, of course, cause much pollution. In fact, in some big cites fresh water can't meet the people's daily need. Future may break out. We may even fight for fresh water than. Now, it's high time that we did something to save fresh water. To begin with, it's important that we should let people aware of the great shortage of water. In the world,furthermore, it's necessary that we should try to make good use of fresh water. Nest importantly, we must take some important measures to prevent our fresh water from being polluted by factories. In a word, freshwater is in great storage. Let's treasure our fresh water.Do remember that there is no water, there is no human beings
