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My favorite sport People in the world love to play sports, not only because it can relax ourselves, but also can exercise our bodies. My favorite sport is playing football. I start this favorite only by chance. One day when I was just at the way home, I got a football near the road, and then I started playing football with my friends and I can't stop it. Then life with a full love with football began. Later I join the school team because of my love with it, so I often practice playing football with both classmates and friends, or sometimes even with my P.E. teacher, so my football skills improved very fast. My favorite football player is Backham from England, he can play football very well. And my dream is to be a professional football player as well as him! I hope it will come ture.