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Mother is the most important person in everyone’s life. Since I was born, my mother has cared for me for 15 years. Though I was very naughty when I was a child, my mother always forgave me. But she also told me what could be done and what couldn’t be done. As the time goes, I’m not a thoughtless girl any longer. With the help of my mother, I become an excellent student in school and a kind daughter in family. I love my mother who gives me life and a warm home to live in. I love my mother who leads me to a bright and right way in my life. Maybe she isn’t pretty, wise or rich, but there’s no doubt she is the most important person in my life.