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My biggest hobby is playing football. I fell into this by chance completely,and once I have picked up a football that nobody wanted on my half way home .I was so excited ,then I called my friends to play with me together, We had a good time and I fell in love with football very deeply. Since then I was training and playing with my classmates. My favorite football superstar is Beckham from England, My biggist dream is become a professional football player like him.