文中词汇表达贫乏,但是单词拼写做的不错;作者有一定功底,可在平时练习中增加长难句的记忆;恰当的使用了过渡词和衔接词,衔接手法做的很棒;请提高文章内敛性,段落和句子要围绕主题展开。
Let me arrange an one-day trip in Beijing for David. There are two places we'd like to go to, one is the Great Wall, the other is Ding Royal Tomb, and both of the above two are on the northern side of Beijing city. I would tell him the stories happened in Chinese history, around the Great Wall and Ding Royal Tomb as well. Anyway, I hope that the above trip will be interesting.