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It is to put all eggs in one basket is like to put you all energy in one thing,It's unwise.somebody will put you all potential to one thing, For example,As college student many student tend to take their enegy to study rather than to all-round development,I not to said college student can't spend time in their study,I just to said college student should take apart in more and more activities to enrich thier college life . So,I think this action is unwise that put all eggs in one basket.If you want to take best advantege of your energy,you had better design a outline,you can do something or you can't do something,It will be very worthy of your life,And you will get best interest to use ypur time . Let's to enjoy it together what it can be make our life more and more colourful.