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Playing football is my biggest hobby,it also my biggest hobby.I love playing football because of one by chance。One day,on my way home,I found a football,then I play it with my friends.Since then,deeply fall in love with playing football; From then on,I always training and competition with my friends.The super star who I like best is David Beckham who born in England. My biggest wish is that I can become a professional football player.Good luck to me.