希望作者可以加强词汇表达多样性,尤其是学术词汇的积累;作者句法知识很棒,适当增加从句的使用,会取得更不错的成绩;过渡词和衔接词使用不恰当,缺少组织,可适当增加连接词的使用。
Dear Tom, I'm heard you will come to visit Taiwan Island.So I glad to tell you something about it. Taiwan Island,the biggest island in China.It lies on west of Pacific Ocean and lies on south of East Ocean and surrounding southwest by South Ocean and lies off southeast of Fujian. Taiwan Island is about 36000 square kilometers and about 20000000 population.In Taiwan Island,you can find lots of bananas,rices,teas and so on.The scenery is so beautiful in Taiwan and the weather also is good that so many travelers come to here every years form all over the world. All in all,I wish you have a good time.