作者使用词汇表达不都灵魂,需要多使用一些学术词汇;采用了一些简单的从句;层次不清晰,几乎没有使用衔接词。
Hello everyone,today i am going to talk about the advantage and disadvantage of Internet. As everyone knows ,Internet those days are being used as a tool to cominicate with the world or other people.It's easily for to know what's going on over the world.And we can find the information we need by using the Internet. But other people are worried about the using of the Internet.There are too many bad people cheating on the Internet.Young people don't know how to recognize the information that showed on the Internet. I suggested that we should do all we can to provide a more healthy environment for the young kids.So that we can let the Internet to be used in a more positive way.