文中词汇表达贫乏,但是单词拼写做的不错;增加一些从句的使用,文章会更不错;层次欠清晰,衔接成分很少;请注意分段;可以适当增加副词的使用;连词使用偏少。
My Weekend Chores On Saturday morning I got up at about seven o’clock. After breakfast, I went to the store and bought some food for the family. I like doing the shopping. I think it’s fun. Then I swept the floor. I didn’t do the laundry and the dishes. I don’t like do any washing. In the afternoon I cleaned out the yard. After that I folded my clothes and made my bed.