作者词汇表达较丰富准确,不过学术词汇的积累还有很大的空间;全文结构较为严谨;作者应适量增加从句的使用量;请提高文章内敛性,段落和句子要围绕主题展开。
Due Attention Should Be Given To the Study of Chinese Chinese,which has been spoken by Chinese people for thousands of years,is now facing a crisis.Many a student pays too little attention to their mother tongue study. But why is it that The Chinese is in such terrible situation?For my point of view,we all regrad Chinese as a daily life necessity,instead of something related more to the aesthetic function.Therefore, just now how to use simple Chinese is OK,which doesn't require every people to pay plenty of attention,let alone their having no conscious to beautify their divine mother tongue .Finally,the neglection of Chinese learning is in the air in China . This phenomenon is awful.Chinese is an extremely glamorous language,and in the history,numerous brilliant poems are written in Chinese ,of which our Chinese people are proud.All in all,the culture heritage should not be abused,and it is our obligation to protect Chinese ,making it more influential in the morden world . Ergo,attention do should be given to the study of Chinese