文中词汇使用较丰富恰当,但学术词汇表达还需要很大提升;可适当增加长句和复杂句的使用;全文结构较为严谨,应适当增加文中衔接词的使用。
Ladies and gentlemen, thank you for attending our company’s news conference. As is known to all, with the economy's developing, people have to face various pressures,therefore, They don't have enough time to attend to the old people in their family, which has become a seriously social problem.on no account can our company ignore it. To solve this problem, our company has put out the household robot,designing to take care of old people.In the first place, It can cook meals at a fixed time, which can be adjusted according to individual needs.Furthermore, It can also accompany old people in having a chat, playing chess and doing exercise and so on.More spectacular, it can deal with emergencies. For example,the report will call fall help when the old people fall ill suddenly. i would appreciate it if you decide to support us.It would be of large help for you if you own such a robot.Thank you for listening.
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