作者词汇量积累不错,学术词汇积累较少;可适当增加连接词和衔接词的使用;简单句稍微有点多,可适当增加从句使用。
No pain,no gain..As a university student,I have to learn to how to live for myself and adopt to the outside word.This is a sort of growth that benefits my whole life. During this time,some students choose the life to waste their precious time to go shopping, play computer games,sleep all day in dorms,but some students are more likely to devote themselves to studying and doing something worth for a better future. What university students usually do on the compus is like a seed,which leads us to success or failing.When we enter into universities,we had sown seeds of the future.The seed may be our original dreams.We have four or three years to nurture our seeds and shape them into what we intend to.So we should prevent them from damages and water them when dry.Sometimes we even need to give nutrition for them. In a word,only we treat the seeds in a good way,can they be stronger and healther. When I was a freshman,I told myself that I wanted to be an English teacher.So I have been spent much time to improve myself, studying English and cultivating myself to look like a real teacher.I always read books in my spare time, indulge in the class and I had managed to ask for the chances to advance the skills of teaching. I think I have been able to stand in front of students confidently.This capability is a kind of reward for me.If I went shopping and watched TV around the clock since I went into the new school,lots of clothing should have been my rewards when I graduate. To sum up,I hold the view that a student’s success in university study follows the pattern as that of farming, which is characterized by sowing the seeds, nurturing growth and harvesting the rewards’ process.