3.你的建议
注意:字数:100左右。可适当增加细节,使行文连贯。
在平时练习中应增加词汇量的积累;结构不严谨,几乎没有使用衔接词,上下文衔接欠流畅;文中词汇表达较为丰富准确,但存在单词拼写错误。
With sharp rapid of technologe development,our life has changed a lot .for example ,online shopping at presant becomes a fashion way. Online shopping is of great benefit to us.ln the first place ,it is a conveinent way for people to go shopping.we could sit ourselves at home rather than go out. On the one hand, it is said that it saves much time.Secondly,Online shopping is aslo cheaper than in shopping malls.On the other hand,it saves money. However,it does us much harm.such as it not very safe that we should pay more attention. In my opinion ,we should treat it carefully.Making full use of conveinence and pay attennion to safety. If we do it ,we will have a good lifestyle.