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注意:字数:100左右。可适当增加细节,使行文连贯。
拼写很棒,可适当增加学术词汇的使用;正确句子比例较高,适当增加复杂句的使用,文章会更出色;文章层次不够分明,缺少组织,需注意文章整体的组织结构。
With sharply rapid of technology development,our life has modified a lot .For example ,online shopping at present becomes fashion . Online shopping is of great benefit to us.ln the first place ,it is a convenient way for people to go shopping.We could sit with ourselves at home rather than go out. On the one hand, it is said that it releases much time.Secondly,Online shopping is also more cheaper .On the other hand,it rescues coin. However,it does us much harm.It not very safe that we should pay more attention. In my opinion,we should treat it carefully.Making full use of convenience and pay attention to safety. If we do it ,we will have a good lifestyle.