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湖南衡阳市八中2013届高三5月月考试卷英语作文

发布时间:2013-05-17 17:12浏览次数:1351
要求:
Directions: For this part, you are allowed 30 minutes to write an English composition on the topic of Online Shopping. You should write at least 120 words following the outline given below:
1.现在网上购物已成为一种时尚
2.网上购物有很多好处,但也有不少问题

3.你的建议

注意:字数:100左右。可适当增加细节,使行文连贯。

用户的作文(系统评分75.0分
评语:

拼写很棒,可适当增加学术词汇的使用;正确句子比例较高,适当增加复杂句的使用,文章会更出色;文章层次不够分明,缺少组织,需注意文章整体的组织结构。

用户练习作文:

With sharply rapid of technology development,our life has modified a lot .For example ,online shopping at present becomes fashion . Online shopping is of great benefit to us.ln the first place ,it is a convenient way for people to go shopping.We could sit with ourselves at home rather than go out. On the one hand, it is said that it releases much time.Secondly,Online shopping is also more cheaper .On the other hand,it rescues coin. However,it does us much harm.It not very safe that we should pay more attention. In my opinion,we should treat it carefully.Making full use of convenience and pay attention to safety. If we do it ,we will have a good lifestyle.

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