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The lives of people are developing,more and more people have their own cars.Yesterday,my classmate had a discussion about cars,and here are what they said. Some students think cars are good.First,it's easier and more comfortable to go traveling with a car.Second,it shows the great develop of our country.Third,it can also improve the other business.But other students doesn't agree with them.First,they thought the cars make air pollution worse.Second,too many cars make more traffic accedent,and the transportation is getting worse.Every year,lots of people dead because of the cars.Third,the problem of car-parking is getting worse. What do you think?