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Dear Tom, When I heard you will visit Taiwan,I'm so happy to get some introduce for you. Taiwan Island,the largest island in our country.Located in the southeast of fujian province, east China sea in the north, faces the Pacific on the east, south-west was surrounded by the south China sea.Taiwan Island is about 36000 square kilometer but there are only population about 20000000.When you arrive Taiwan,you can see the more different kinds of biological and a lot of bananas,rices,teas and so on.Taiwan so beautiful scenery, pleasant climate, so that more and more visitors from all over the world. At last,I wish you have nice time.