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Now many kids have some problem in daily life.For example, less effectively communicate with others,they don't know how to do housework.What's cause that happens? Because of many families just have one child,they put all their love to their babies, they want the kids have a happy childhood,fear the child suffer a hard time,so the parents provide a convient way that the child no need to worry about it to their child.But when the child growth up,they don't know how to live without the help by their parents,they rather bear the situation they are suffering than to solve it,all those issue it's their parents made. In that case,we need to help them to change their mind, let them live an independent life, learn to do all thing by themselves,and we also let the other parents know the disadvantage that don't let the child independent.