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My father
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My father I have a good father.He is 40 years old.He is tall and fat.He has short hear.And he has two big eyes.He is very cool. He is a math teacher.He works very hard.Class lively, loved by students.And he is Honest and kindness.He likes playing ping pong very much.And he thinks ping pong is the most interesting sports in all games.In our school.He is very humorous.In the class.He is very strict and not kind.In our home.He is No status.He will ask us service in our home.