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It's wrong to draw a conclusion when you saw or heard something.Because things are always difficult.I remembered that was an afternoon at my age of 10. As usually, I went home after school that afternoon, I saw Tom ,one of my best friends and my neighbour,was getting a banana from the shopping mall without paying. I was so surprised that I forgot to ask him the reason. I felt very angried that night,but I didn't want to talk to him.Until I moved to other place I didn't get touch with him. It's about 10 years later, I met him at shanghai. I tried to ask him why he had done that thing. I was so shamed when he told me that he was giving back the banana because he lost it.
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