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On the last weekend.I visited Beijing zoo.Many people fed the monkeys and played with the tigers.Animals and people are friendly.We should treat the animals. Protect the environment against pollution is very important.Don't drop litter carelessly at the zoo.Everyone knew protect wild animals is important.Because protected animals are protecting ourselves. I think protected wild animal is really interesting.So we should protect animals right away.