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I have a good friend. She is a beautiful girl. She has long black hair, two big black eyes as well as a red mouth. Her voice is better and she is good at singing. Meanwhile,She is a clever girl. She likes reading books , playing computer games and chess. She not nice but also often helps us . In our class,we all like her very much.