小学一年级英语作文:Good friend

单词拼写做的很好，请注意积累词汇量；正确句子比例很高，但需多多加强从句的使用；连接词过少，建议增加衔接词汇的积累；连词使用偏少；请注意分段；请提高文章内敛性，段落和句子要围绕主题展开。

my friend is a teacher,we are classmate . we are come from shenzhen. my friend is a teacher,we are classmate . we are come from shenzhen. my friend is a teacher,we are classmate . we are come from shenzhen. my friend is a teacher,we are classmate . we are come from shenzhen.