文中单词拼写做的很棒,再多积累些词汇就更好了;可适当增加从句的使用;层次不清晰,几乎没有使用衔接词;请注意分段。
I love my school,my school isn't only beautiful but also very modern.My favorite subject is English,my English teacher is very kind.I took part in English club when I was a student of Grade 8.My school had a lot of activities.Our club's number entered these activities actively.I costume a girl witch can use magic.I got on well with all of my classmates.All of our classmates are friendly and easily to get on well.I think my school life is meaningful and colorful,I miss it!