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A beautiful place in China If my friend will come to China, I'm going to take him to The Great Wall.The Great Wall is the most charactest symbol of China tourist attractions. It has been build up more than two thousand years and what even more unbelievable is it located in tall and rugged Hill ten thousand of miles of wall.What a wonderful place! When you standing the wall and look down the sight of the great mountain,you can't help doing cheering.It is a genuine man should be visited place. I promise that we will have a good day at The Great Wall.