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Hello, welcome to China. My hometown is in Huizhou. It is a beautiful city. The air is very fresh. If you go to Huizhou, I would like to take you to West Lake in Huizhou. Its name is West Lake couse it has a very big beautiful lake.You can enjoy a beautiful sunset near the lake. And you can go boating too. In the boat,you can enjoy the scenery aroud the lake. There are some moutains. If you want to do some exercises, climbing mountains would be a best choose in Weat Lake. A big tower is on the top of the mountain. You can know the history in Huizhou. There are also some places to play. Like the goast house. It is very intereting if you don't scare.And also it is a palce that many lovers come to visit. It is suitable for us to have a walk after meals. The weather here is not hot. It is a good palce to see. I am looking forword to having a trip in the West Lake with you.
