单词拼写做的很好,请注意积累词汇量;加强一些长句和复杂句的使用;层次欠清晰,衔接成分很少;请注意分段;请提高文章内敛性,段落和句子要围绕主题展开;连词使用偏少。
My new teacher is the english teacher.She is a very lovely teacher. She likes to help us learn english. She favorite to paly the baseball,singsong and swimming.We like very her.Because of teacher is a very good girl. She has long hair and big mouth.She eyes very Charming.My like very the english teacher.