单词拼写做的很好,请注意积累词汇量;可适当增加从句的使用;层次不清晰,几乎没有使用衔接词;请注意分段。
I have a good friend,he is a boy,he is very clever and very cool.he has black hair,two big eyes and a red mouth.He is very clean.I like he very much.He likes running,jumping and reading books,i like he and he like me.He is my classmate.we often play together,so,we both very happy.