衔接词和过渡词用的很不错;多注意下文中出现的错误句子会取得更好的成绩;文中词汇表达稍欠丰富,注意文中少数拼写错误;请注意分段;请提高文章内敛性,段落和句子要围绕主题展开。
Now ,english is more and more popular. as far as we know,,ti is important to communicate each other on english .but ,many people do not like spelling and writing.. only if they don not communicate well ,will they find which spelling and writing are vrey important .so ,in my opinion ,spelling and writing should be given .