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Dear Mr. Green, I am very excited to learn that we are going to start a magazine together. It is indeed a wonderful idea and everyone hopes for its success. I would like the magazine to have three columns: News, Teachers' Advice and Students' Voice. From the News column we can learn about what is going on in both of our schools. In Teachers' Advice, our teachers can give us such help as we may not be able to get in the classroom. Students' Voice will allow us to freely express our thoughts and feelings about our lives and studies. As is the mentioned above, I believe that this magazine will surely strengthen our ties, and I am looking forward to reading it. Yours faithfully, Li Hua