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Lt has a big dog.This name is dud.DuD is 9-year-old.DuD is a girl. DuD is very cute pets.My very like to play with dud. DuD has two big eyes.Look like are stars.DuD like to help me mon defend huose.DuDu very like to eat meat.DuD like to talk walking.So l often bring dud go to talk walking.my parents and l like very dud.