单词拼写做的很好,请注意积累词汇量;增加一些从句的使用,文章会更不错;连接词过少,建议增加衔接词汇的积累;请注意分段;连词使用偏少。
It has a warm house.My house has my cute parents, my brother, my sister and pets is dud.OhOhthey has me.My house is a big home.Becase has very much people.My parents are a teacher.They often help to us student english. so we very like english that us english results very good. my pet name is dud.It is very cute pet. we very like dud.My brother and sister is a students.They are very like to read a books.we often go to library.Becuse of has very many books.