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My holiday is happy.Because my spent too much time on holiday.My remember father to with me go to rock climbing.That day is very happy.My father aften say student book to help to much people.This is very good thing.SO my am hard student book in the holiday.Something l go to help old people clean home.So some peoples is like very me.HeHe, my also like them.My holiday is a good and happy.