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Last weekend,I interviewed psychology professor Kelly Lam about chinese students` recommendation concerning sharing. We came to a conclusion that whatever happy or upset,up to thirty percent students are unwilling to share it with others.With the exception of this,it is conspicuous that our education doesn`t make students aware of the significance of sharing. Expert Kelly Lam supposed that all of us should learn to share,for it is of great importance to share in the generation we live in.Besides,being able to share is advantageous to our growing in the future.