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Hello,my foreign friend,welcome to china,guangzhou,my hometown,which is well-known as the FLOWERS CITY. Now,let me introduced it to you.Guangzhou city have a population of one-hundred-thousand and have a long history.The economy of guangzhou is very prosperous,and guangzhou city become the centre of financial economic.The tourism is very popular there,and every summer there come hundred and thousands visitor. I think there is a good place to come and I can garantee that you will fall in with this city.