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With the development of society,there are more and more cars on the road. As a result, the traffic is becoming much busier than before. compared to the traffic in the country, it is more difficult to solve the traffic problem in the city. Since there are more people in the city than in the country, people always meet teaffic jam on the road, especially when they are on the way to and from work. So, how to solve the traffic problem? First, people should be encouraged to go out using public transport system instead of taking the car. They can also walk to work if it's not far from home. some people ride to the underground station and then take the underground. Then they walk to the office. I think this kind of lifestyle should be encouraged. Second, governments should take action to control the problem. For example, cars can be allowed to get on the road according to the car numbers. On the other hand, offical cars should be controlled and they can't be used for private use. We have only one earth. To prevent the traffic from being too busy is not only good for the convenience of people but also good for the health and growth of ourselves and the next generisions.