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With the development of society that computer has been widely used.It's very important that internet is widely used by many people in their daily life.May women like shopping in the internet,because they can purchase anything there,For example:Clothing、Books、Handbags、Fruit、Shoes ect. I like on online shopping too. I think it is very convenient and quick and have more the variety of produce.So the online shopping have more advantages,but take some risks.In my opinion,the quality of produce can't be ensured,even if we may buy some fakes. Therefore,We must keep our mind clearly and buy right things.