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With the development of society that computer has been widely used.At the same time,the internet will become very important too,it has widely used by many people in their daily life.Many women like shopping on the internet especially,because they can purchase anything there,For example:Clothing、Books、Handbags、Fruit、Shoes ect. I like on online shopping too. Because I think it is very convenient and quick,and else have more the variety of produce.Therefore the online shopping have more advantages,but it will take some risks to us.We can know that the quality of produce can't be ensured on internet,even if we may buy some fakes. In my opinion,We must keep our mind clearly and buy right things.