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Which gets the conclusion immediately while see and listen. The truth is a conclusion, not a process. We get an information is just a part of the whole truth maybe.We must have different directions of perspective to observe the things.This is a story, that there is an elephant in the space, and several blinds.We let blind touch the elephant and then tell their feel what they get. Someone say this is a post,and the other say is a fan,and other say is a whip. The elephant likes the things we went, but is so long that we can get a part we think the whole.
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