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Nowadays, more and more people use internet as a very important tool when they study, search information, do business and purchase of daily necessities. As we all know, internet makes our lives more convenient and effecient though it also has some negtive influnces. For example, some teenagers or adults are addicted to internet. They surf the internet days and nights. It destroys not only their studies and work, but also their health. However, internet benefits are more than bad points. I think we need to think out some solutions to help teenagers and adults overcome their addiction. Let me show you three ways to resist the addiction. Firstly, if our family members are addicted to internet, we should help them develop other hobbies in order not to surf the internet days and nights. Secondly, we need to promote some weaknesses from the internet so that they may feel scary. Last one is that we can encourage them to do more outdoors. In a word, we can dominate the weaknesses, so we don't need to be worried about it. To conclude, internet is useful and convenient.
