请作者增加词汇丰富度;正确句子比例很高,但需多多加强从句的使用;全文结构不够严谨,文中很少使用衔接词和过渡词;连词使用偏少。
This is my bedroom.It's so beautiful. There are droplight on the wall. There is a computer on the table. There is a dresser in front of the wall. There is a mirror on the dresser. There is a tooth pate and a toothbrush and a gray cloth. There are two cups on the small table. There is a duvet on the bed. There are two pillows on the dresser. There is a quilt on the bed. There is a sheet on the quilts. There is a green curtain and white wall. There is not a sofa, so I want to buy a sofa. She stood in front of me. She stood in the front of my yard. I don't known what should I do. Why do you say that?