使用了简单的从句;层次不清晰,几乎没有使用衔接词;文章中拼写错误较多,同时请作者增加词汇丰富度;请注意分段。
When I grow up。I want to be a teacher.Because teacher can help too much people student much culture.In the feture, the people need student culture.Because the people needs culture help them to do work.In now,l have to hard student culture.My teacher tells me student culture can help too much people.So the teecher often help me student more than culture.In the feture,i believe me is a good teacher.