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When I grow up。I want to be a teacher.Because teacher can help too much people student much culture.In the feature, the people need student culture.Because the people needs culture help them to do work.In now,l have to hard student culture.My teacher tells me student culture can help too much people.So the teecher often help me student more than culture.In the feature,i believe me is a good teacher.