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Late years,it is necessary that many parents help their children to choice new jobs,even if many parents arrange all for their children in the future.They hope their children have a good further and the way to the future living luckily. It is right for this,But the children will get more independence.They must learn how to dependent on themselves solve all questions and difficulties for they will face. In my opinion,parents in order that training the children have good abilities for future living,our parents must not do more for them,and make chance to their children to opt for them.At same times,our children still hoping make choices for themselves,and to opt they are an interesting job.