但从句使用不熟练,注意平时练习中多积累;衔接成分太少,文章结构欠佳;请作者增加词汇表达的丰富度,且检查文中的拼写错误;请注意分段。
My grandfather is a kindly oldest people.He loves life,So he often help the other people clean home and student culture.They likes very grandfather.My grandfather often help me student the chinese culture,for example: sanguoyanyi and hongloumei.My grandfather have two big eyes and short hair.So he look like very cool.He has much good friends.They often go to fishing and play the baskeball.